Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays,
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increasing number of individuals who has medical problems choose
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reliable alternative medicines and treatments rather than
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doctor
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appointment. From my standpoint,
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development is worse because it is a sight the
sciences
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, which is mostly medicine field,
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losing trust possessed.
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, many
people
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search for a way
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outside of
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sciences
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science
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.
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, they do not have enough money to treat. On the one hand, alternative medicines are cheaper than conventional medicine
cure
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. That’s why, many
people
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chose to try unreliable
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.
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, they not only lost money but
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take a risk
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if they were lost, they would die. Actually, they know
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possibility, but their social economic situation does not enable searching for real treatment.
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, it can be obviously said that all humans must be equal
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reaching the medical cure.
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should not be
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barrier
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in front of treatment.
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, the
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become unreliable position in
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the patient
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eyes. It is a crucial problem because if
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were rejected in
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the community
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, it
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immediately appeared
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unscientific ways
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as religious
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methods
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or alternative treatment.
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of
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,
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society regresses and
break
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breaks
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through some problems which are medical and wealth etc. That’s why, we pay attention to public tendency. In
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content
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context
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, if several
people
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may increasingly think that conventional medicine is a trap, we must fix the impression.
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, not only
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lost
own
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their own
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health but
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the
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society collapses.
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, the given situation is a big problem for humanity because it had a small piece of bigger problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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