The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.
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The diagram illustrates several steps of how to manufacture olive oil in the factory.
It is clear that
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there are 7 main stages in
this
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production, beginning with collecting raw olives from trees and finishing with storing and trading the resulting extract. As can be seen, during the first stage, olives are picked from the crops and rinsed with cold water to wash away all the dirt. Afterwards, a belt is used to convey those clean olives to a huge tank where they are smashed carefully in order to separate olive paste and seeds. These stones
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are not necessary anymore.
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, in the fourth step, ground olive flesh is put into bags with various holes and pressed by pressure.
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it is transferred to a separating machine to be divided into the finished oil and water.
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, after the products are maintained in bottles to store easily, it is packaged in boxes before being delivered to different markets for sale.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harvesting
  • Ripe
  • Sorting
  • Crushing
  • Paste
  • Grinding stones
  • Steel blades
  • Pressing
  • Extraction
  • Liquids
  • Centrifuged
  • Settle
  • Purified
  • Distribution
  • Olive trees
  • Labels
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