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The number of people who are fat and overweight are much higher than previous generations. What are the reasons? What can be done to solve this problem?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is some
countries
 have problems
due to
 the deprivation of resources and abilities. Now people are beginning to realise that wealthy nations should support poorer
countries
 , providing them with quality educational and medical centres. Personally,
i
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 tend to think that if one republic has the ability to help others ,
then
 it is necessary to
themsupport
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the support
them support
.
Firstly
, it is well known that some parts of our world struggling with the absence of cutting edge technologies to contribute and generate goods and services, that can be fed by rich states,
for
instance
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 a tremendous number of
countries
 in Africa continent have outrageous amounts of minerals, but they can not get any profit from fossils,
therefore
 they are unable to develop their province. A good case in point is currently
United
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 States sharing its machines, and technologies with Africans and mining their fossil fuels and offering some proportion of their own financial gains, which is profitable for the two sides.
On the other hand
, it can be argued that undeveloped
countries
 have no privelogious universities that can produce educated and qualified workers who are able to invent new innovations. In search of knowledge and
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 ,life students from underdeveloped nations move to other more modernised places,
such
 as the US, European
countries
 and Asian giants. Take
for example
 students of the IVY League, an overwhelming majority of them are from African and Asian lands. To combat
this
 problem the governments of these provinces have to attract investments from wealthy nations, to build high-quality institutes. Take
for example
 Kazakhstan, entrepreneurs from Germany who were interested to construct colleagues,
as a result
 nowadays at Nazarbayev University they are studying approximately 10000 students from all over the world. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that it is a significant problem of today's world that can be tackled only cooperatively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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