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Children find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention to school. What are the reasons How can we solve this problem?

#children #attention #school
In recent times,
Children
 face
challenge
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 to focus or pay
attention
 to
school
. There are several reasons why
the
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children
 encounter
difficults
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difficulty
to pay
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attention
to
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at
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school
,
however
, there are some
measure
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can
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taken
 by the governments
as well as
parents
 in
order
 to improve
this
 situation. On the one hand, there are
a
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various reasons why students struggle to pay
attention
 to their studies. The
primray
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primary
 reason why
children
 face
difficults
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difficulties
difficult
 to pay
attention
 to
school
 is
expensive
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 fees of
school
. To illustrate, some
children
 work part-time
while
 they study in
order
 to meet the
requriments
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requirements
 of
school
 namely, fees,
books
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and books
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, which means students can find
difficult
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 to achieve study-life-balance.
Consequently
, the students are more vulnerable to struggle with mental health issues, depression,
anxiety
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, which these problems
makes
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 them less
attenion
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attention
attentive
 to their education. Overusing
of
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technology
 is
the
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another reason why
children
 cannot concentrate in their
school
.
For example
, some
children
 spend a considerable time in
fornt
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front
their
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of their
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 computers or smartphones in
order
 to play video games until late time, which means
children
 do not get enough sleep.
Therefore
, lack of sleep can have
a negative impacts
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a negative impact
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in
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children
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children's
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 academic performance.
On the other hand
, there
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of
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actions
can
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taken
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 by the authorities and
parents
 to mitigate
this
 issue. Regarding
government
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, the government should provide affordable or free education for
children
, which
this
 step can make
children
do
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not need to work
besides
 study. In terms of
parents
,
parents
 should set limits for their
children
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children's
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 usage of
technology
.
For instance
,
parents
 can turn off
the
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technology
such
,
computers
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as computers
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,
smartphones
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and smartphones
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 before midnight in
order
 to motivate
children
 to sleep early.
To sum up
, there are different causes why
children
 suffer to pay
attention
 to
school
 including, expensive fees
school
, Overusing of
technology
,
however
, there
some
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solution
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 to tackle
this
 issue namely, the lawmakers could provide free education for all
children
,
parents
 should censor the
children
 of usage of
technology
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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