The table below give information about sales of fairtrade labelled coffee bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The table below give information about sales of fairtrade labelled coffee  bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
The two charts illustrate the
amount
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of
sales
of
fairtrade-labelled
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fair trade-labelled
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coffee
and
bananas
in two specific years in 5 different European countries.
Overall
, it is evident that
UK
and
Switzerland
had the highest turnover in both categories with
remarkable
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rise for
UK
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the UK
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in
coffee
and for
Switzerland
in
bananas
.
Moreover
, all nations faced an upward trend in
coffee
sales
, but
in
contrast
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Sweden
and Denmark had a decline in their figures in terms of
bananas
. In terms of
coffee
,
UK
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the UK
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is the leader with a significant 13fold rise in its share with 20
millions
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of
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euros.
Likewise
,
Switzerland
doubled its quantity from 3 in 1999 to 6
millions
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in 2004. Denmark’s
sale
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sales
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also
increased from 1.8 to 2.
Moreover
, both Belgium and
Sweden
recorded a rise in their
ration
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ratio
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with
0.7
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millions
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million
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increase for Belgium from 1 million and
0.2
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climb
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for
Sweden
from 0.8milllion.
On the other hand
,
Switzerland
ranked
the
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first in
bananas
with
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tripling its
sales
quantity from 15 to 47.
In addition
,
UK
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increased its turnover from 1 million to 5.5 respectively and faced 5fold growth. Belgium
also
recorded the third place with reaching the 4
millions
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million
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ration in 2004. Unlike other countries, Denmark and
Sweden
declined in their
sales
quantity
near
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than half, 1.8 to 1 for
Sweden
and 2 to 0.9 for Denmark.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, uk, switzerland, sweden, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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