The line graph below shows changes in fast food consumed in the UK between 1970 and 1990.

The line graph below shows changes in fast food consumed in the UK between 1970 and 1990.
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The graph illustrates shifts in the amount of fast
food
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consumed in the UK between 1970 and 1990. Several trends are apparent.
Firstly
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,the UK population are eating more and more fast
food
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.
Secondly
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, the type of fast
food
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has changed.In 1970, the most popular fast
food
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was pizza. Over 300g were consumed each week. By 1990,
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,
this
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had fallen to just over 200g -a 50% drop. Consumption of other fast foods
such
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as fish and chips and hamburgers increased,
however
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. The number of hamburgers eaten shot up from about 20g a week to more than 270g, overtaking pizza in the late1980s. Fish and chips consumption
also
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increased, rising from about 80g in 1970 to 500g in 1990.Accompanying
this
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change in the choice of foods was an
overall
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increase in the amount of fast
food
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consumed. In 1970, British consumers ate about 450g a week of fast
food
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. In 1990,
on the other hand
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,
this
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had more than doubled, to almost 1000g.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, g with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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