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Some feel that governments should prioritize healthcare instead of other important areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether governments should consider
healthcare
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 as the priority of each
country
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 has always been a subject of many debates
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 some
people
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 believe that other areas of countries have the same importance as
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healthcare
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. In
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 essay, I will explain why I agree with the first statement. The main obvious reason is being healthy assists young
people
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 to increase their productivity. The future of each society firmly depends on the young generation
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, their
health
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 is a key indicator to acquire a developed society. The more their
health
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 be in good condition, the more they become useful in their future career. In
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 case, governments should provide suitable and free
healthcare
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 to accomplish their goals in different segments
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, education and culture as well in the
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.
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, in Iran,
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health
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 services are free for those young ones who are learning to teach elementary school children, since they make children ready to become useful and healthy in the future of
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country
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Although
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 the
health
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 of juveniles helps countries to implement better, it should be provided for
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old
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 as well.
It is clear that
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 many adults might face various diseases simultaneously when they are getting older,
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, the need of referring to hospitals is growing in them. To make it simple, Government authorities are in charge to take care of these old individuals to stay healthy in their retirement age.
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, it is a regulation in our
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, Iran, that those who have paid for their pension and become retired after many years of work, have not to pay for the costs of the
health
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 services after the age
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of 60
. In conclusion, I firmly agree that governments should consider
healthcare
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 for all ages
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 priority. The reasons are that it helps the
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 to develop in every aspect
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 it is the right of old
people
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 who have been working for many years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • preventive medicine
  • public health infrastructure
  • social determinants of health
  • fiscal allocation
  • government expenditure
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • life expectancy
  • pandemic preparedness
  • health equity
  • social safety net
  • holistic approach
  • non-communicable diseases
  • cross-sector collaboration
  • socioeconomic status
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