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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Whys might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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It is believed that
people
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 in a few countries prefer purchasing a
home
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 more important as compared to renting accommodation.In my opinion,
this
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 case is
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 shifting
home
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 trouble
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 being faced by the
people
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.Yes, I think it is a positive situation.
Firstly
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,in rental accommodation,
people
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 face a
lot
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 of complications.
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,in rental apartments,
people
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 spent a
lot
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 of money on improving their living
place
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such
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 as wall decorating walls,garden work and improving other facilities(Bathroom,laundry and kitchen) which they can not live their whole life.
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,they have to shift from that
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 after a certain period of time which consumes a person`s time,energy and money.
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, it is
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 difficult to leave any
place
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 after getting used to living
place
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.Indeed,rental accommodation is not a good choice if someone can afford to purchase a
home
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.
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, a
lot
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 of worries can be solved by having own
home
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.
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,first of all, a person has the authority to make changes in the
home
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 to facilitate himself
such
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 as changing flooring ,architecture or installing anything new or removing anything old
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 a person does not have to worry about paying any kind of rent which becomes very difficult to pay in circumstance of financial problems.
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,all of the aspects of owning a
home
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 which has been described can make life easy, peaceful and comfortable.As
people
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 prefer owning a
home
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 rather than paying rent because
people
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 enjoy living a worried life.
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, in my opinion, a rental
place
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 comes with a
lot
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 of problems and
that is
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 the reason
people
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 want to own a
home
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 in my opinion is a positive approach to owning a house
while
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 a rental
place
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 is
also
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 important because it is a business which carries a
lot
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 of money.
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