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the chart shows that male and female teacheres in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010

the chart shows that male and female teacheres in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010
The provided chart illustrates the distribution of the teachers' workplace.
It is clear that
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 the early stages of the educational setting are highly female-dominated and vice versa. The late steps are male-dominated. The gender gap reaches
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 enormous amount in the very first step. in the nursery, women took all the share of the plate (approximately 100%).
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 the gap is huge in the primary, the has been a downward trend.
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, in college the number of
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male and female workforce is equivalent. What's more, there is an up trend in the proportion of
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male as we reach out to the end of the chain.
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, university instructors are mostly men. In
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, they contain something around 70% of the share.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational setting
  • gender disparity
  • workforce distribution
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • further education
  • higher education
  • adult education
  • trends
  • implications
  • representation
  • gender roles
  • societal views
  • significant differences
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