the chart shows that male and female teacheres in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010
The provided chart illustrates the distribution of the teachers' workplace.
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the early stages of the educational setting are highly female-dominated and vice versa. The late steps are male-dominated.
The gender gap reaches to
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enormous amount in the very first step. in the nursery, women took all the share of the plate (approximately 100%). Change the word
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the gap is huge in the primary, the has been a downward trend.
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, university instructors are mostly men. In other word
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