The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and

about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
Given two charts illustrate the numbers of comers and goers
of
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UK
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the UK
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,
as well as
the countries which are mostly visited by
UK
residents.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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the amount of
UK
residents who visited
to
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foreign countries had outweighed others who are overseas people and visited
to
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the
UK
over
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20
years
.
Moreover
,
due to
the second chart, France can be considered the most popular country
where
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were
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visited by tourists,
as well as
Turkey had caught the
last
place on
this
list. To introduce, in 1979 the numbers of people who were
UK
citizens and visited
to
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other countries were just above 10
million
;
however
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it continued till 1985, in the following
years
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a
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peak and showed
significantly
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result
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in 1999(above 50
million
). Whilst, the amounts of humankind who
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to see
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were 10
million
and preserved its stability over 8
years
, and in the next 10
years
climbed just below 30
million
.
On the other hand
, France was mostly visited country by
UK
citizens(approximately 11
million
);
however
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Turkey saw only 3
million
tourists who came from
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the UK
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. The next country
where
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were
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preferred by
UK
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the UK
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overseas was Spain ( just below 10
million
). The second and third place on
this
list were Greece(3.5
million
) and USA(4
million
).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.

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