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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
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Given two charts illustrate the numbers of comers and goers
of
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in
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UK
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the UK
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,
as well as
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 the countries which are mostly visited by
UK
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 residents.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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,
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 the amount of
UK
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 residents who visited
to
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foreign countries had outweighed others who are overseas people and visited
to
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the
UK
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over
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 20
years
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.
Moreover
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,
due to
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 the second chart, France can be considered the most popular country
where
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were
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 visited by tourists,
as well as
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 Turkey had caught the
last
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 place on
this
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 list. To introduce, in 1979 the numbers of people who were
UK
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 citizens and visited
to
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other countries were just above 10
million
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;
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however
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 it continued till 1985, in the following
years
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 went up
a
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peak and showed
significantly
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result
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results
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 in 1999(above 50
million
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). Whilst, the amounts of humankind who
chosen
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 to see
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UK
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the UK
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 were 10
million
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 and preserved its stability over 8
years
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, and in the next 10
years
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 climbed just below 30
million
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.
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, France was mostly visited country by
UK
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 citizens(approximately 11
million
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);
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however
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,however
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 Turkey saw only 3
million
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 tourists who came from
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UK
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the UK
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. The next country
where
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that
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were
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was
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 preferred by
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UK
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the UK
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 overseas was Spain ( just below 10
million
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). The second and third place on
this
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 list were Greece(3.5
million
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) and USA(4
million
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).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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