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Band 2

Buying things on the internet, such as books , air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh disadvantages?

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Introduction
In
today
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today's
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ear
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era
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 many
indiviudals
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individuals
 prefer
On line
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Online
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 shopping
especially
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,especially
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 in terms of books,air tickets and groceries.
that
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 has
advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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this
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assey
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essay
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discusses
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in
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some points.
Body paragraph 1
As
amatter
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a matter
 of fact many people
nowdays
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nowadays
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' prefer shopping
out line
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outline
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 more than traditional Methods like souqs or small shopping for several
reasones
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reasons
. for most technology was
shiffted
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shifted
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mare
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more
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easly
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easily
 and more a
viliable
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variable
valuable
viable
that
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is make
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makes
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 people purchasing every
things
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thing
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 they want for a button
whith
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with
 a hug of a
diffrent
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different
choicess
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choices
.
Mover
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A mover
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 that could save the time of
boght
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bought
or when the
prodcts
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products
 are in
brod
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broad
 of their country.
Body paragraph 2
In
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 the flip said there are
alot
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a lot
 of
benfintes
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benefits
for
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of
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tradtionally
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traditionally
traditional
 shopping like wise the deatiels of
purchase
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purchasing
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 things they can test
it
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them
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beofore
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before
 selaing .
furthermore
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 it is
cultural
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a cultural
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 way to found much
friend
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friends
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whith divarty
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with diverse
nation
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nations
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and
some time
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sometimes
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 make
comminication
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communication
 between
population
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populations
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strongly
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.
Conclusion
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conclusion
conclison
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bothe
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both
 of them are
a
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apply
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significant in our life to be in life development and to save the sense about things.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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