The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar chart details the average weekly spending for families in a given country in 1968 and 2018. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that
while
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spending for
food
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, fuel and power, clothing and footwear, and personal
goods
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declined, the inverse was true for the remaining categories, with only household
goods
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unchanged.
Although
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spending on
food
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was by far the most common in 1968, by 2018 leisure occupied most of the family budget, followed closely by housing. In 1968, families spent, on average 35% of their weekly income on
food
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, significantly outstripping other budgetary concerns, each of which represented between 5% and 10%. Among these, fuel and power were the lowest at 6%. By 2018, spending patterns diverged more widely.
Food
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represented a still significant 17% of the budget, trailing housing at 19% (a 9%
overall
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rise) and leisure at 22% (a 13% increase). Transport
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displayed a notable growth of 14%. Fuel and power, clothing and footwear, and personal
goods
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fell to 4%, 5%, and 4%, respectively. Household
goods
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were the only expense to remain fixed, at 7%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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