Some people think that it s better to impose higher taxes on unhealthy food, while other disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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, to me, putting higher taxes on unhealthy food will not
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people from eating junk food. If a government will impose more
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on unhealthy food
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people. My viewpoint is discussed below.
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how junk snack is
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society
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two sides good
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society will eat less unhealthy.
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side is that the poor
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society can not buy expensive drinks.
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of body health can
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shop
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good and bad. The benefits are as a community will buy less
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will be helpful for the nation body but on another
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governments.
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of drinks
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is less healthy but
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the price
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will be low
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population will buy more and more.
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ask
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for more tax from a shop
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population will
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to buy. In conclusion,
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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