Successful sportsmen can earn a great deal more than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
In
this
day and age, a great deal of
successful Change the quantifier
a lot of
many
plenty of
sportsmen
outearn
other Change the verb form
outearns
professions
that are more important by a big margin. Some people thinks
that Change the verb form
think
sportsmen
deserve the amount they earn while
others question the
amount paid to Correct word choice
whether the
sportsmen
are
more than a professional job. In Correct subject-verb agreement
is
this
discussion, we will talk about why some does
not have any objection towards the pay of a successful Correct subject-verb agreement
do
athelete
Correct your spelling
athlete
while
some protest against the unfair pay to important professions
. At the end
of the essay will be my opinion regarding this
matter.
To begin
, a successful sportsmen
deserves to earn more than an important Change the noun form
sportsman
professions
as they too tried their hardest in training and coping with stress. Many Correct the article-noun agreement
profession
athletes
spend their younger days to win
games and Change the verb form
winning
bring
fame to the country Wrong verb form
bringing
while
receiving backlash when they underperform which will cause them to fall into depression. For example
, Lee a world renowned
professional badminton player was deemed the best in the world until he met his rival, Lin. Lee lost multiple times during the tournament and placed Add a hyphen
world-renowned
second,
this
causes his fans to spread hate speech about him which he defnitely
took a big hit during that time.
Correct your spelling
definitely
In contrast
, some protest against the fact that athletes
earn more than some other important profession because they weigh the value of what both parties provide to the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, people tend to talk about the unfairness in payment for important profession
. Fix the agreement mistake
professions
For instance
, a scientist who found a major breakthrough in technology earns twice lower than
Change preposition
as
athletes
even though he helped humanity to take a big leap in new technologies.
In conclusion, while
athletes
is
able to earn more money compared to other key Change the verb form
are
professions
with their fame, that does not stop a profession
to be richer than an athlete given that he Replace the word
professional
excel
in starting a business or research facility. Change the verb form
excels
Nevertheless
, I think that both parties deserve what they are paid for how much they have tried to mix their career into a business model.Submitted by honzent99 on
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