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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provided illustrates the research result regarding citizens in Five
Australian
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 cities'
coffee
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 and tea consuming habits. The data includes statistics in Sydney, Melbourne,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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.
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, most
Australian
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 population have gotten caffeine at cafes since around 1 month ago. In the same timeframe,
Australian
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 people tended to buy
instant
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coffee
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 over fresh cappuccino, especially in
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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.
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,
Australian
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 citizens preferred to have a cup of
coffee
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 or tea at onsite stores. Melbourne had the most percentage at 64% approximately; the first and second runner up were
Hobart
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 and Sydney, with 63% and 61% of the town's population respectively.
Adelaide
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,
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, was the only city where the proportion of people getting to cafes for caffeine consumption (49%) was slightly less than the preference for purchasing
instant
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coffee
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 (50%) in the past 4 weeks. Moving on to the
coffee
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 purchase behaviour, it is evident that the
instant
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 version of
coffee
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 was bought more than caffeine in a fresh condition.
Hobart
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, followed by
Brisbane
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, had the biggest proportion of Australians buying ready-to-go
coffee
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 within the
last
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 4 weeks, with 54% and 53% correspondingly.
Adelaide
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, the second runner-up of the greatest number of citizens purchasing
instant
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coffee
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, was the only town where the percentage of
instant
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 cappuccino purchased slightly won the popularity of going to a
coffee
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 shop.
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, focusing on the obtainment of fresh
coffee
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, under 50%
from
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of
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 each
Australian
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towns
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town
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 were in
this
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 group; Sydney exhibited the most number
of
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approximately 45%,
whereas
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Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 were the least in
this
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 category: under 35%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, coffee, brisbane, adelaide, hobart, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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