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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Purchasing items on the Internet namely, books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming increasingly common. In my opinion, the merits of online shopping outweigh the demerits. On the one hand, there are several drawbacks
of
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 shopping through
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the internet
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internet
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.
Firstly
,
people
 who buy things online are more vulnerable to
become
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 victims
for
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 cybercrime.
This
 is because some hackers can make fake online shopping websites.
Therefore
, they can steal money from
people
via
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 using the information
of
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on
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 credit
card
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 or
visa
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visas
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.
Secondly
, online shopping is
is
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addiction .
This
 is
due to
 the fact that online shopping is convenient and accessible, which
this
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can encourage
people
 to
consum
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consume
 goods they
realy
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really
 do not need.
Consequently
, online shopping can have a negative
impacts
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impact
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 on the environment, because the most of products produce result
of
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 deforestation.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue that the benefits of online shopping
significantly
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more far
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 than
downsides
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the downsides
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. The first advantage,
online
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of online
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 shopping is convenience. To illustrate,
people
 do not require to go to local shopping centers in order
in
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 purchase their things.
Thus
, online shopping can save a considerable amount of time for
people
.
Allows
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people
 access to
global
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the global
a global
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 market is another advantage of online shopping.
For example
,
people
 can purchase items
such
 as
,
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 books,
groceries
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and groceries
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 through global markets namely, Amazon,
IHerb
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and IHerb
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, which
this
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give
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people
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to experience a wide range of goods
with
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at
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 affordable.
Furthermore
, online shopping
make
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 the shopping market more competitive, every
companies
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company
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 will compete to provide
a better goods
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a better good
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 in order to gain
satisfied
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of
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from
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 customers.
To sum up
, In my perspective, the upsides of online shopping
is outweigh
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 the downsides
,
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 because
it
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isit
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 comfortable as
as
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well
give
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gives
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people
 access to global markets.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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