write a short paragraph(150 words),about your country(VietNma or another country).Your writting should include.

#paragraph #country #vietnma

country

VietNam

is a small

country

but beautiful.It lies in Southeast Asia and

VietNam

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VietNam's

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total area is about 331,690 sq.

kilometers

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kilometres

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with a shape like an S.

Besides

the population of our

country

is about 90 million

peoples

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people

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with 54 ethnic groups living together in harmony,

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apply

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which Kinh people account for 86% of

whole

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the whole

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population..My beloved

country

is famous for its historical events.Those events are imprinted in foreign

friends

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friends'

friend's

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mind

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minds

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because of being

fience

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finance

fierce

war.

Also

VietNam

is well-known for

the

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its

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beautiful scenery,traditional

fesival

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festival

festivals

and our customs.

To begin

with,my

country

has some of the most prominent examples would be

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as sapa

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sapa

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,Ha Long Bay,

and

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Pho Co Hoi An and so on.These places

gives

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give

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such

an ethereal beauty.Despite the

commescialization

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commercialization

commercialisation

which has been taking place in recent years,

fortunately

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most of the landscape still

remain

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remains

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untouched by

mankinds

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mankind

.The second

ones

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one

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is our traditional festivals which

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are

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Hung

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the Hung

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King Temple

festival

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and Huong Pagoda

festival

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.From generation to generation

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apply

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the date of 10th day of the 3rd lunar month and in the 15th century by three monks(Huong pagoda festival).People

are celebrated

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have celebrated

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these festival

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this festival

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recommended

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the heroes.

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these day

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this day

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beside

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memoried the hero residents can take part in many fun activities

such

as boat

ride

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rides

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along the yew stream and even wrestling.

Finally

,our symbol custom is ao dai associated with

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Vietnam

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vietnam

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vietnam's

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historical

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history

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for a long time ago.Nowadays Ao Dai

is be

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modern and use to wear in high school or for

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the wedding

a wedding

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wedding

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weddings

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.In conclusion,Vietnamese people are friendly and enthusiastic. They welcome visitors to their

country

with open arms and friendly smiles.

Thus

our

country

worth-living

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worth living

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Thu Jul 13 2023

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
38Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

257 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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write a short paragraph(150 words),about your country(VietNma or another country).Your writting should include.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

A lot of people who wanted to become professional athletes gave up this idea because of the fear of failure and parents' pressure. Do you think that parents should support their children who want to do a career in sports?

Big family has more benefits than living in small family.

some perants buy their children a large number of toys to play with. what are the advantages and disadvantaged for the child of having a large number of toys

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case? Do you think this is a positve or negative situation?

‏In many countries today, both men and women need to work full time. Therefore, some people think men and women should share household task equally (e.g. cleaning and looking after children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?