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Many people today choose to take part in extreme sports,(eg skydiving, rock climbing) Why do you think people want to do these sports? Who do you think should pay if people injure themselves while doing an extreme sport?

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Nowadays, lots of
people
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 decide to engage in extreme
activities
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 as skydiving or rock climbing.
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 is because they want to challenge themselves and get out of their comfort zones. Since
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 is a kind of sport and any injuries could be gotten if
people
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 aren't careful enough so I believe that it's the individuals' responsibility to pay for their own injuries. One reason why some
people
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 would like to participate in extreme
sports
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 is that they want to push their limits to see how courageous they are. Since these
activities
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 require a lot of bravery and skills,
people
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 have a tendency to give them a try, either to prove themselves or to satisfy their curiosity when doing things that the majority of human beings can't do.
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, by taking part in skydiving,
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 have an opportunity to experience the feeling of free-falling and the activity gives them the impression of being on the verge of dying which appears to be appealing and cool to them.
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, despite the help of the equipment involved in the
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, participants may be injured
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 their not fully comprehending how the things they carry with them work.
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 can result in serious damage to human health
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 our bodies
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 as broken bones or worst, death. No matter how dangerous the
sports
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 are, I believe that
people
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 who are willing to take part in the
activities
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 should pay for any wound they get
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 doing the sport because when they agree to engage in the extreme sport, it means that they know exactly what risk are they taking and need be responsible for any accident that crops up along the way.
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, rock climbing is an activity that demands lots of skills and techniques so participants who are injured in virtue of their lack of knowledge should pay for the treatment of their own wound. In conclusion, extreme
sports
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 are attractive to some individuals because they want to step out of their limits and try things that most normal
people
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 don't dare to try. Since they are the ones who are happy to challenge the
activities
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, they should be aware of the consequences of extreme
sports
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 and be ready to pay any fee that comes
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 their mistakes which injure themselves.
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