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Some people believe that increasing tax on various industry will reduce pollution whereas others believe that they are better alternative ways.discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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It is widely argued that the rising of
tax
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 is the best solution for decreasing pollution, the others say that it is better to do other modifications. I believe
tax
 does not solve
this
 issue and it should be better to consider other ways. Some people agree that
tax
 is only the best remedy for declining pollution
releasing
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 by
industeries
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industries
. In doing so, they believe that the authorities of factories try to
emitt
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emit
less
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 pollutants in order to pay less
amount
 of money as
tax
.
Nevertheless
, it is possible that
,
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 some of
owners
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the owners
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 of these
industeries
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 efforts reach more income,
as
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 a result, they accept a huge
amount
 of
tex
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as well as
 a higher income. All in all, for tackling
this
pitfull
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pitfall
pitiful
 we must find different methods. Many regulations have
rectify
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 the problem of air pollution and waste materials.
Instead
 of
tax
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a tax
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,
firstly
, governments and
descision
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decision
 makers must restrict the
expanding
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 of new
industeries
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industries
.
Secondly
, factories must be forced for establishing wide green spaces.
Thirdly
, Paying an enormous
amount
 of fine would be another solution for some of the owners of industrial places who break the law in terms of
the
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production and releasing greenhouse gases and toxic elements.
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Finally
, the activities of these places must be restricted
in
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to
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 particular
time
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times
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 of
a
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day
such
 as mornings,
in addition
,
in
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 the winter, because,
in
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at
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 these
time
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, weather conditions make
this
 negative setback worse. In conclusion, forcing industries for paying a great deal of
tax
 would not be helpful to decreasing
amount
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the amount
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 of
pollutant
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pollutants
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,
governers
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Governments
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 must consider
the
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apply
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other solutions,
for example
, constructing manmade forests,
fine
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fines
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 and the restriction of
enlargment
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enlarging
 new factories.
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