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The diagram below shows information about carbon dioxide emissions for popular private jets.

The diagram below shows information about carbon dioxide emissions for popular private jets.
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The given table illustrates the amount of carbon dioxide emission per hour including the price of several types of private jets
Overall
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, more
fuel
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 needed for private jets impact in a higher number of CO2 generated by planes
as well as
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 the
flight
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cost
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. Looking into details,
it is clear that
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 most of the CO2 is earned by Gulfstream III with approximately 10,078 per hour which is the highest since they needed 488 gallons of
fuel
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;
therefore
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, they demand around $6,750 as their
flight
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cost
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. Gulfstream 550 and Challenger 605 bring about 8,342 and 6,180 for CO2 emissions, respectively.
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, the number of their
flight
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cost
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 the same as the previous ones.
On the other hand
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, Cresna CJ II emitted the least with 3,002
due to
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 only needing around 136
fuel
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 in an hour and generating $2,700 in their
flight
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cost
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. Beetchet 400 and Hawker 400XP
also
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 spend the same price as Cessna CJ II even though both only need 182 and 188,
subsequently
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. Cessna Citation XLS, Learjet 60, and Hawker 800XP spend $4,500 which need more than 188 gallons of
fuel
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 and generate around 4,000 CO2. Interestingly, Hawker types have different
flight
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 costs
while
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 they require the same number of
fuel
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 and
as a result
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 CO2.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, co, flight, cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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