Today more and more tourists are visiting place where conditions are difficult,such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.What are the benefit and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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where situations are hard, namely the desert or icecap.we will consider both

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hard conditions for living.

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unique species or

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different species of wild animals.

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places

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can be more dangerous than calm.You know,the casualty rate is more between them throughout the journey.

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they will return back to home.

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can be critical for

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attractive trip,but there are problems throughout the tour that result in victim between them against wild animals or atmosphere conditions.

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