The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. ▪Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet.

▪Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar gives information about the data of time in 1000s over five weeks that 3
computer
packages
were downloaded from the internet
such
as
ActiveX
, Java, Net. As an
overall
trend, the number of times
computer
packages
ActiveX
were downloaded from the internet
is
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increased,
also
remained constant for five years and
finally
ActiveX
always highest than either
computer
packages
on even weed,
while
that portion of
packages
Net was lowest than all weed. As the diagram's success
for
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showing up to
we
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clearly the data of three
computer
packages
was downloaded, the
computer
packages
java increased steadily about 45s to 85s between
week
1 to
week
5.
While
the figure Net a sharp drop
about
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38 units to 23 units in
week
1 to
week
3, but the
last
2
week
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about 23s to 44s.
According to
the record for
Packages
ActiveX
dramatically increased from about 73 unit time to 110 unit of time from
week
1 to
week
3. The next
week
,
slow
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decreased
14
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by 14
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units and
at the end
5
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of 5
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weeks it rocketed by about 25s
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, packages, activex, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • Number of times
  • Per week
  • In thousands
  • Five weeks
  • Computer packages
  • Downloaded
  • From the internet
  • Summarize
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Trends
  • Peaks and troughs
  • Figures
  • Popular
  • Overall
  • Patterns
  • Anomalies
  • Sudden spikes
  • Declines
  • External factors
  • Influenced
  • Download trends
  • Marketing campaigns
  • Software updates
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