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It is often said “when in Rome, do as the Romans do” Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they visit? Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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Nowadays,many
people
 frequently say "When in Rome,do as the Romans do" and
this
 quote got a big spread throughout the world.In
this
 ,essay I would like to discuss why each person ought to adapt and accept the
culture
 of the country he visits and think about whether it is possible or not to learn a lifestyle without knowing the
language
.
To begin
 with, I will give two reasons why we should follow the rules of the country we travel to.
Firstly
,in a foreign ,territory you ought to act like
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possessiner
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possesser
 of
territory
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 do.
For instance
,if someone came to your home and started trying to change your rules,you would be furious by his actions,
due to
 the
fact
 that it is abrasive from your guest.
Secondly
,if you are willing to be the desired guest,you need to obey the laws of
territory
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 that you are going to.In simple words,if you showed respectiveness to someone,they would double it to you. To start with, I will give two reasons why it is nearly impossible to learn a
culture
 without adequate skills of
language
.First of all,it would be very complicated to communicate with
people
.Not only can not you entertain yourself,but
also
 you can not understand the
culture
 of the local
people
.Because of the
fact
 that
people
 create
culture
,so to engage in the lifestyle of local
people
 you need to get in touch with them.
Moreover
,it
also
 will be complex to read books and
newspaper
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 in
local
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language
.
Consequently
, you will not understand the
culture
,given the
fact
 that books and writing all profoundly and significantly affect
culture
. In conclusion,we need to appreciate the rules of the country we travel to,to be desired quest and just be polite
people
.
In addition
,you can not learn a
culture
 without knowing the
language
,
due to
 the
fact
 that
language
 is 95 per cent of our history and
culture
.
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