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In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

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A
community
 is often formed by
people
 who have something in common, living in the same building. Unfortunately, during the
last
 decade creating a
community
 of
neighbours
 has become more difficult. There are several reasons that helped to create
this
 problem. In
this
 essay, I will describe some of them with their possible solutions.
Firstly
,
people
overall
 in big cities tend to have limited time to meet their
neighbours
.
This
 phenomenon increases the possibility to find meet their
neighbours
 become impossible. As a matter of fact, when someone asks them if they know with whom they live around, they usually answer negatively and barely show any interest in knowing other
people
 in the same place. One way to solve
this
 tendency might be asking them to meet once every month and make them sign contracts of less than one year.
Moreover
, nowadays,
people
 are becoming more shy, probably because of the advent of social media.
For
this
 reason, they are not confident meeting their
neighbours
. Organizing periodic meetings between
neighbours
 could be an efficient way to create a
community
 of
people
 and maybe a friendship between them. In conclusion, in a society in which
people
 tend to move a lot and are sometimes negatively influenced by social media is difficult to create a
community
 between
neighbours
.
However
, by working on new laws regarding the duration of location contracts and pushing
people
 to meet periodically, it is possible to contrast
this
 tendency and build a
community
 of
neighbours
 and perhaps friends.
Submitted by Andrea Barreto on

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