You’ve read an article about the company you work for in a business magazine. The article contains information that is wrong. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: •give details of the magazine •explain what information about your company is wrong •suggest what you think your manager should do

Dear sir, I am writing to you regarding the online article posted on our organization's Twitter account
last
Friday. At
first,
when I saw the headline, I was fascinated to read its content,
however
, I was a bit disappointed to find some incorrect information in it. To be precise, it was the fifth edition on trending topics across Africa, published on the 3rd of August, 2024 on our Telegram handle, and
subsequently
posted on the Twitter page.
Although
it was the first series for the month
and
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at the end
of it, it was stated that more would be released in subsequent weeks. As to the specific errors that I found in it, the writer gave incorrect details about the current Nigerian president, and the mistakes included the wrong date of birth and unprecise educational history.
Therefore
, I found these disturbing having gone through the review board before publishing. As a solution, being a reputable company with a good record of accuracy, I would suggest the article should be withdrawn from the media, and be re-assessed again by the board. More importantly, a viral apology message should be sent to the public noting the mistakes and prompting them on when necessary corrections would made. I look forward to your consideration and positive feedback from you. Yours faithfully, Moses.
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Consider adding more specific details about the magazine article to strengthen the response.
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Try to use paragraphs more effectively to separate different ideas and points.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and appropriate greeting and closing, maintaining formal tone throughout.
complete response
The writer addresses all parts of the task effectively, explaining the error and providing a suitable suggestion.

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