The three charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1992, and 2001.
The pie chart below compares the proportion of a school's
expanditure
in five different categories namely Correct your spelling
expenditure
insurance
, Use synonyms
teacher
's salary, Use synonyms
furniture
and Use synonyms
equipment
, Use synonyms
resources
and other workers' salaries over a 20-year timescale between 1981 and 2001.
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Overall
, it is clearly seen that the data Linking Words
of
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for
teacher
's salaries accounted for the most in the total spending after 20 years from 1981 Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
figure
for Use synonyms
insurance
was Use synonyms
opposite
during the same period. Correct article usage
the opposite
Additionally
, the percentage of Linking Words
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teacher's
and other Fix the agreement mistake
teachers'
worker's
salaries witnessed Fix the agreement mistake
workers'
the
downward trend gradually, Correct article usage
a
by contrast
, the Linking Words
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insurance's
data rose slightly in two decades.
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insurance
to
the data Remove the preposition
apply
of
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on
insurance
and the Use synonyms
teacher
's earnings. It is obvious that the Use synonyms
figure
for Use synonyms
insurance
climbed slightly by 6% after two decades, Use synonyms
by contrast
, the percentage of Linking Words
teacher
's earnings experienced an upward trend after a decade and Use synonyms
then
dropped slowly from 50% to 45% in the same period
In terms of the Linking Words
figure
for Use synonyms
furniture
& Use synonyms
equipment
, Use synonyms
resources
and other employers’ income. It is clearly seen that the percentage of other employers’ Use synonyms
earning
and Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
furniture
, Use synonyms
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equipment
plummeted by 6% and 10% respectively in the first 10 years, Correct word choice
and equipment
by contrast
, the proportion of Linking Words
resources
soared from 15% to 20% in the same period. Use synonyms
However
, in the next Linking Words
decade
the Add a comma
,decade
figure
for Use synonyms
resources
and payment for other workers decreased significantly by 7% and 11% respectively Use synonyms
while
the ratio of Linking Words
furniture
and Use synonyms
equipment
rose by 17% in the same timescale.Use synonyms
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