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The younger generation is mainly responsible for the least technological developments. How far do you agree?

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These days,
technology
 has become inseparable in modern societies. Some claim the younger generation plays the main role in recent development in
technology
,
while
 some say it stands on the shoulders of a giant from the previous century. I agree to an extent that the young generation contributes to the majority of nowadays
technology
while
 acknowledging the inventions from the previous
generations
.
This
 essay will discuss my points of view and provide some examples to support them.
Firstly
, most of the latest influential
technology
 companies are found and managed by people younger than fifty years old. They gained great success by challenging the status quo with new perspectives and targeting children to young adults.
For example
, The founder of Facebook, Mark Zuckerberg is still under 45 years old as
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 essay
written
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, and his business inspired the blossom of other social media in the 2000s.
Secondly
, the usage of
technology
 rose rapidly only in the
last
 decade.
It is clear that
 the majority of its users are the younger
generations
.
For instance
, almost all children are exposed to
technology
 like tablets and mobile phones as early as 1 year old, and the skills of using these devices are essential for their education,
while
 many elders have no interest in learning them.
In other words
, the younger
generations
 encourage the improvement of technological development the most.
On the other hand
, some may say the dramatic growth of
technology
 can only happen with the knowledge from
the
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previous
generations
. Without the inventors of the computer and internet, young people would not be able to create any online media or
device
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 we rely on nowadays. All in all,
while
 I believe in the contribution of inventions from the past, there is no doubt the younger
generations
 like Zuckerberg, children, teens and young adults are mainly responsible for the latest technological developments. In my opinion, the next generation will overpass
this
 one and bring in more innovative ideas.
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