The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.

The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.
The diagram illustrates several steps of how the production of ceramic pots is carried out in the factory.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are 10 main stages in
this
process, starting with getting raw materials from the underground and ending with the resulting products as the porcelain wares. As can be seen, during the first stage, raw materials are dug up by a large digger and
then
taken to the factory for manufacturing by trucks. Here, clay is crushed two times to make sure it is pulverized carefully.
Next,
before being moulded in the moulds, the mixture is combined with water and
then
let dry for about 4-6 hours. Once the clay wares are assembled, they are baked in the oven under a high temperature of over 1000 degrees Celsius.
Subsequently
, those keep undergoing a colour firing procedure after being coloured.
Finally
, the finished pots are done for sale.
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