The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.

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The diagram illustrates several steps of how the production of ceramic pots is carried out in the factory.

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it is clear that

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there are 10 main stages in

this

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process, starting with getting raw materials from the underground and ending with the resulting products as the porcelain wares. As can be seen, during the first stage, raw materials are dug up by a large digger and

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taken to the factory for manufacturing by trucks. Here, clay is crushed two times to make sure it is pulverized carefully.

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before being moulded in the moulds, the mixture is combined with water and

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let dry for about 4-6 hours. Once the clay wares are assembled, they are baked in the oven under a high temperature of over 1000 degrees Celsius.

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, those keep undergoing a colour firing procedure after being coloured.

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, the finished pots are done for sale.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

150 words

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The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.

Some people think that governments should invest mainly in making public transportation faster while other think there are more important priorities (cost, the environment). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Overpopulation in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

Some people think the government should subsidise fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Others argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Your neighbour has animals and they cause noise. Write a letter - Describe the situation - Suggestion to solve the problem - Tell him what will you do if he will not solve the problem

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taugh to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.