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The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The above pie charts describe
about
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apply
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the
reason
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 for migration. The data is about the UK in 2007. The
reason
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 are explain explain
in
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apply
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below. The
reason
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 for immigration and emigration. The information contains 6
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reason
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reasons
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 for
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 place. Formal study, accompany and join, looking for jobs and works, definite job, no
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 stated and other. There are two pie chats.
Firstly
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, in emigration lowest is
due to
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 formal study 4%,
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highest is
due to
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 a definite job, 18% because of no
reason
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 stated, 14% for other, 13% for accompanying/joining and 22% looking for work.
Secondly
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, the
reason
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 for immigration is lowest
due to
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 no
reason
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 stated
with
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 6%, the highest
due to
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 a definite job at 30%, 11% because of other, 26% because of formal study, 15% because accompany/join and 12%
due to
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 looking for work.
Thirdly
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, the lowest in immigration is 6%. In conclusion, there are 6 reasons for migration.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "explain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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