The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagram depicts the manufacturing
process
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involved in the framework of producing
sugar
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derived from
sugar
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cane
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.
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, it is important to note that the whole
process
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takes eight features and the procedure is divided into seven stages in
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case from the harvesting of
sugar
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cane
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,
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to the
sugar
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crystal separation and
finally
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becoming dried
sugar
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. With respect to the diagram, the
process
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commences with growing
sugar
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cane
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harvested manually by a farmer.
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, another method of harvesting is lifted up into a container with a tractor. The next stage in the
process
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is for the crusher machine
to begin
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crushing
sugar
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cane
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until become juice.
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this
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, after purifying mechanism, the limestone is filtered and juice appears. Let us now consider the phase of evaporation, the evidence from
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step demonstrates that juice is boiled by a combustion tool to generate syrup. In the subsequent
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, the centrifuge functioned to separate
sugar
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crystals in syrup. Eventually, dried and cooled
sugar
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can be obtained purely.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar, cane with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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