People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Undoubtedly, we could say that
current
generation Correct article usage
the current
are
living Change the verb form
is
far
superior Correct article usage
a far
life
, in compare
to decades earlier. Replace the word
comparison
Therefore
, it is believed that individual
are living Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
significantly
transformed Add an article
a significantly
life
. It seems to me that, enhancement in medical
field, infrastructure, development and so on, Add an article
the medical
which
made me agree Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
Change preposition
with
this
phenomenon.
To begin
with, if we compare evolution when our grand parents
lived, and even now. It has surged drastically to its point. Correct your spelling
grandparents
Whereas
, we are exploring far better life
than our ancestors did, yet they do had
a quality Change the verb form
have
life
in
their terms. Change preposition
on
However
, 21st
century Correct article usage
the 21st
have
not only internet enabled us but Correct subject-verb agreement
has
also
created artificial intelligence. Furthermore
, technological aspect
have created Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
a
freedom, but people from previous Remove the article
apply
time
had invented Fix the agreement mistake
times
us
Correct pronoun usage
apply
a
telephone and many other inventions. Which, had Change the article
the
bring
Change the verb form
brought
a
popularity Remove the article
apply
in
smart devices nowadays. Change preposition
to
As a result
, whatever the
creation who took Correct article usage
apply
a
place in Correct article usage
apply
past
Add an article
the past
generation
, Fix the agreement mistake
generations
are
now providing its importance to Change the verb form
is
this
century. Thus
, enlargement in transportation have
now become Change the verb form
has
convenient
and much Correct quantifier usage
more convenient
affordable
, than it used to be.
Correct quantifier usage
more affordable
On the other hand
, there are medical and healthcare facilities, which have now developed to both
treatable and Add a missing verb
be both
successful
Change the word
successfully
to
cure dangerous Fix the infinitive
apply
disease
and viruses. Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
For instance
, back in time majority of doctors had either lack
Correct article usage
a lack
in
equipment and resources or technology to perform surgery. Change preposition
of
Whereas
, in current days with help
of science and technology Correct article usage
the help
medical
is able to provide not only seamless treatmentReplace the word
medicine
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
assurance
of Add an article
the assurance
an assurance
healthy
lifestyle. Correct article usage
a healthy
Moreover
, we should also
need to remember that, past researchers and science
had found Replace the word
scientists
cure
Correct article usage
a cure
of
Change preposition
for
vicious
virus, and so today polio, malaria, Correct article usage
a vicious
dengue
is curable.
In conclusion, there are some significant inventions in Correct word choice
and dengue
past
decade had Add an article
the past
major
role in our current lives. In my opinion, from a perspective and from technological development we are living healthier and finest Add an article
a major
lifestyle
, yet we should praise people from ages ago who helped us to create Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
this
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