More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think is a possible solution?

In developing countries, much more
vehicles
are being sold by citizens for the first time. The principal
problems
this
causes are pollution and
traffic
congestion, and the most viable solution is to make more suitable
traffic
system
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such
as
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train
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trains
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and public
transportations
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. The primary issue developing countries face when their citizens start to buy
cars
is increased pollution.
The
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occurs
as a result
of an overconsumption of petrol
vehicles
and other kinds of
cars
that have a negative impact on the environment. The greater number of
vehicles
on the road is
also
responsible for a rise in
traffic
jams.
This
is because every citizen wants to save
their
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time to travel around the city using private
cars
, but it makes
traffic
jams.
For example
, in Mongolia, most people in Ulaanbaatar city have private
cars
;
however
, they spend many hours on the road. A solution to these
problems
is to make
much
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more public
train
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trains
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like highspeed
train
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.
This
would solve the
problems
by
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suitable
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traffic
system
, and
also
we can save many hours of travelling on the road.
For example
, in Japan, they have
highspeed
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trains, which can travel ten times faster than common private
vehicles
. In conclusion, buying and using
cars
make many huge
problems
such
as
traffic
jam
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jams
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and air pollution, but if states will create suitable public
train
system
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systems
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like highspeed
train
system
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systems
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, all those
problems
would be solved.
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