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The table below shows carbon dioxide emissions from transport in three European countries in 1994 and 2004.

The table below shows carbon dioxide emissions from transport in three European countries in 1994 and 2004.
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The given table provides an overview of carbon dioxide
emissions
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 from four main
transport
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sources
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 (namely,
road
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transport
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, railways, civil aviation and shipping) in the United
Kingdom
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,
France
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 and
Germany
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 in 1994 and 2004.
Germany
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,
although
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 having higher
emissions
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 than either the United
Kingdom
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 or
France
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 , saw the amount decrease slightly from 47.2 to 46.7
million
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tonnes
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.
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,
France
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 recorded an increase of four
million
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tonnes
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 from 34.7
million
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 in 1994,
while
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 the United
Kingdom
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 had a smaller growth, 2.5
million
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tonnes
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 over the same period. In all
three
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 countries,
road
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transport
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 was responsible for the majority of
emissions
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. In the United
Kingdom
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,
road
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transport
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 produced
emissions
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 of up to 32.6
million
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tonnes
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 in 2004, 2
million
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 more than ten years earlier,
while
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 the other
three
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transport
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sources
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 did not show any remarkable growth. A similar pattern was seen in
France
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, where
road
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transport
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 added 3.6
million
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tonnes
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 to the total
emissions
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 within ten years.
Germany
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,
by contrast
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, was the only country of the
three
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 to experience a drop in
road
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transport
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emissions
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. The other
three
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transport
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sources
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 had a lower emission volume as well, except civil aviation, with the amount rising to 1.2
million
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. As shown in the table, both the UK and
France
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 failed to reduce carbon dioxide
emissions
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 from
transport
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sources
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 during the period 1994 to 2004,
in contrast
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 to the decrease in
Germany
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.
Road
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transport
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 continued to account for the biggest source of
emissions
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, transport, sources, road, kingdom, france, germany, million, tonnes, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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