You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to share my concerns about my roommate in the dormitory and to request a room
change as soon as possible.
I have two main complaints about my roommate, first
he is bringing his friend to our Add a comma
first,
room
without my consent and they always making noise. Additionally
, sometimes he cooks and eats inside the room
which causes a very strong and irritating smell in our room
. It is really hard for me to focus on my job with this
smell, or noise they are making with his friends .Even if I warned him , he said that it's their traditional way of living style however
, I am waiting for some respect and personal spacing in such
a shared dorm area.Due to
his disrespectful behaviours, I am struggling to study and have difficulties working.
As mentioned above, I am looking to change my accommodation type as soon as possible. If possible , I prefer a single room
which can be a shared bathroom. I understand that any price rises depending on the room
type, however
, I need somewhere calm to do my business. I am comfortable paying more to upgrade my accommodation type,
since I have difficulties with my current accommodation and roommate and issues with studying and working.
I am Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,Remove the comma
apply
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Task Achievement
Clearly state your room preference early in the letter to ensure that the officer understands your request immediately.
Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph contains a single, clearly focused issue. Separate the complaints about noise and smells into different paragraphs for clearer structure and readability.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use linking phrases such as 'furthermore' or 'additionally' when moving from one issue you are describing to another to improve the flow of ideas.
Task Achievement
When describing problems, provide specific examples and details for each. This will make your concern more vivid and compelling.
Coherence & Cohesion
Remember to close the letter politely, showing gratitude for the reader's time and assistance. This has been done well, but make sure it matches the formality of the opening greeting.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
