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In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, the
number of
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older population is growing,
that
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 might add some difficulties for
government
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by
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 the decrease
of
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 workers.
However
, some
people
 believe that there are some benefits
of
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 it.
Firstly
,
older
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the older
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 population is not able to work resistant and hard as
youngers
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younger
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 do. Their
life time
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lifetime
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 and strength are about to end, so they are provided with the retirement period that gives them money without working. That means that government have to allocate more for those social merits that
doesn't
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 bring much profit. That's bad for
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capital
in
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financial
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 level.
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, I can say about the crises
that
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experienced
Kazakhstan
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in Kazakhstan
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last
 year, because of
high
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 funds spent on social safety. Kazakhstan provided
absence
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the absence
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 of taxes and high pensions for
people
 working
on
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 the field of fuel production in 2004,
this
 help
have
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 been used by a lot of
people
 until now and
consequences
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 of it appeared
last
 year by a huge amount of mad
people
 asking for
this
 fee. The government calmed down everyone by returning the money and by removing
this
 law.
That is
the
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 suitable example of
impact
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the impact
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 of
older
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the older
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 population on
country's
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the country's
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 capital.
On the other hand
, older
people
 are
the
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 important part of
the
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society. They are the ones who won't let
lose
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them lose
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cultural
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their cultural
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 identity. Sometimes it might be bad that they are always trying to teach
youngers
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younger
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 about
past
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the past
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 and traditions. Albeit, they are keeping the history of
whole
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the whole
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 nation in
the
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simple daily habits.
For instance
, I remember how my grandmother was
explaining
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 me how to knit and sue in
traditional
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kazakh
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 style. After her
death
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 I find out that she
teached
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 me
the
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 ancient technique that
about
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 to extinct. That's why I think
aging
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 populations are important members of civilians everywhere Taking everything into account I think that even if ageing
people
 bring some inconvenience to the country, they have
huge
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 influence on cultural development and it outweighs everything.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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