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The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The pie charts show the main reason for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The two pie charts demonstrate the key reasons why
people
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 immigrate to and immigrate from the
UK
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 in the year 2007 percentage-wise.
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, it is evident that the predominant factor that determined
people
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’s decisions is employment. Regarding job-related reasons, three out of ten immigrants came to the
UK
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 to have a definite job and the figure was similar to the emigrated ones, at 29%.
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, a noticeable percentage of
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,
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22%, left the
UK
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 to find a job, larger than immigrants’ 12% by 10%. Another major reason for
people
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 moving to the
UK
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 was formal study, accounting for a quarter of the total immigration,
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 only a minority of
people
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 (4%) left the
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 reason.
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, the proportions of
people
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 moving to join their family are nearly the same for immigration and emigration, at 15% and 13% respectively.
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 but not least, just under one-third of the emigrants provide other reasons or did not give a reason. For immigration,
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 category made up 17% of the total.
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