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In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children nowadays is greater than in the past. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays it is observed in some countries that people prefer to become
parents
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 at an older
age
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 than they used to in the past. In my opinion,
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 is a positive development and I would be sharing the reasons for the same in the following paragraphs. To start with, having a
child
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 comes with enormous expenses. From the medical expenses of a newborn to their education, every year the cost of having a
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 gets compounded.
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, having a kid at a later
age
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 ensures that
parents
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 get the time they needed to attain financial stability as they would get more time to focus on their careers.
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 in turn helps in securing a brighter future for the
child
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.
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 to that, as a person ages, they grow mature which helps them become better
parents
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. At a younger
age
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 everyone is so focused on building their own future, and figuring out how to lead their lives that they find it hard to take up the responsibility of raising a
child
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.
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, as a person grows, he/she tends to become calmer, more understanding, and compassionate, which are essential qualities in a parent.
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, some might argue that having a
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 at a later
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 results in a generation gap that results in misunderstandings being created between the kid and his/her parent.
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 seems to be futile because no matter what the
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 gap having minor arguments is a part of life. On top of that ensuring a stable future for children is of higher importance, which young
parents
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 often lack providing, and that in turn erodes the relationship between them. To sum it up, having an
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 gap between
parents
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 and the kids is a positive development which not only helps in the upbringing of the
child
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 but
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 ensures the couple becomes better
parents
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.
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