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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of energy used by standard households in Australia and the
gas
 reales
due to
 these usages.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that a large amount of the electricity is used for house heating,
whereas
, refrigerators, cooling and lighting consumed less than 10% of the energy in an average Australian house. The heating produced 15 %
gas
 emissions which
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 approximately 3 times less than its consumption,
whereas
 other appliances resulted in 28%
gas
 release comparatively around 2 times greater than its electrical usage.
On the other hand
, water heating wasted more than 1/4 of daily power and emits the same amount of greenhouse
gas
 into the air. Moving forward to other usages, it has been observed that 15% of the current is spent on it,
while
 the proportion for cooling and lightening has been noted as under 5% and responsible for 3% and 8% of gases released in the environment.
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