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The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table compares the world
population
 distributions in the six regions from 1950 to 2050, over a period of 50 years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
while
 the
population
 of
Africa
 is expected to increase, the proportion of people in Europe will decrease. It is
also
 can be seen that
total
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the total
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population
 is predicted to grow significantly. In detail, in 1950, the world
population
 was 2.5 billion, and
this
 number will considerably over the next 50 years and reach 9 billion in 2050. In terms of main regions,
Africa
 is the only region that shows
a
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substantial growth, increasing from 9% to 2%, over twice
? .
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.
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unlike
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Africa
, Europe
experience
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experiences
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 a noticeable fall, decreasing from 22% to 7%, dropping nearly by
third
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a third
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. The most
crowed
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crowded
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 region was Asia in 1950
by
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 56% of the worldwide
population
, but
this
 percentage will show a very small rise over the period, finishing at 59% in 2050. The
population
 of the other continents are not very noticeable. From a slight percentage contribution of 6% in 1950, the people of
Africa
 are predicted to have only 3% growth by 2050. Similar to Europe, the
population
 distribution of
the
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North America will constantly drop over the time frame, from 7% to 4%. The only continent
that is
 not expected to show a change is
Oceana
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Oceania
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, which
remaining
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remains
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 around 1% over the 50 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, africa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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