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In the modern world, schools are no longer necessary because there is so much information available through the Internet that children can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In light of the growing popularity of the Internet, it is true that children nowadays have the ability to study various subjects remotely through online platforms at any given time at home. I totally disagree, and my view will be explained in
this
 essay.
First,
the proliferation of the Internet could give rise to a host of serious consequences. The foremost problem is that the data volume on the internet is immense, but most are unverified. Having said that, it is quite hard to determine whether information from
this
 platform is useful or not.
For example
, parents just need to type the keyword "How to do when the child has the flu?" on the most popular search tool today, called Google. Surprisingly, you find dozens of knowledge, most of which come from word of mouth, sharing, or other traditional methods. It is confusing to determine which is the right solution, and chaos results from here.
As a result
, children can learn knowledge from online applications, but learning what is completely a different story.
Furthermore
, outside of the practical learning aspect, offspring are not experienced enough to learn by themselves but need mentors, in the case of self-study, they must be their own parents.
However
, it is really complicated to prove that their parents have enough educational expertise to guide them in the right direction.
For example
, in the primary school curriculum in Vietnam, students not only learn core subjects
such
 as Mathematics, Literature, and English but
also
 learn science and social subjects.
This
 requires a sufficient number of teachers with relevant expertise the child needs to learn and these teachers need to have pedagogical qualifications
as well as
 many years of teaching experience.
Therefore
, let's ask the question, do mentors who are fathers or mothers of children have enough knowledge to teach them? In conclusion,
although
 it is irrefutable that the trend in which students use online platforms in modern education could give rise to a number of adverse implications, I do believe that the downside of
this
 phenomenon is more noteworthy than its upside.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal education
  • structured learning environment
  • self-paced learning
  • personalized learning
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • socio-economic disparities
  • qualifiable educators
  • motivation
  • tailored teaching methods
  • media literacy
  • critical thinking
  • routine
  • discipline
  • extracurricular activities
  • holistic development
  • well-rounded education
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