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Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Others say countries should have their own law. Discuss both view and give your opinion .

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In
this
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 era, the legal
system
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 plays a vital role in our nation, because people obey rules only when it is drafted by an official.
One
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 of the most controversial issues
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 happening is, whether to have
one
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law
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 throughout the
world
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 or own
law
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 for each
country
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. In
this
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 essay, I am going to examine both views and end up with my opinion in conclusion. On
one
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 side of the argument, a few people guess that a single
law
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system
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 is better throughout the
world
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 because it will give equal rights to humans and they can
also
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 travel all around the
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 without any restrictions.
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: with
one
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 legal systemwithout fear, a person can travel around the
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, as there will be no issue with a visa. In regard to rights, there won't be anymore caste-based reservations in the education
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, which is followed by a few countries.
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 helps to reduce the racism as well. Though, there are a few advantages to it, let's see another point to know about the disadvantages. On the other view, they disagree to have a single
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 throughout the
world
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. It creates an impact on the culture and tradition.
Whereas
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 every
country
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 has their own belief and custom, those will get affected when it is followed by a single term.
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: Each
country
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 has a different public holiday like Christmas, Diwali and Pongal etc. Based on that they will allocate
law
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 regarding holidays, but when we combine it with a single
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 it will affect their productivity and the other factors too.
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, In my opinion, each
country
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 should hold their own
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, in spite of universal
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.
This
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 will help to have a smoother
country
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 operation.
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