the table below shows the number of mobile phones and personal computers per thousand people in six different countries in 2003.

the table below shows the number of mobile phones and personal computers per thousand people in six different countries in 2003.
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the information regarding the
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of cell phones and personal
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in 2003 in six different countries per
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people.The data is calibrated
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,Iceland had
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number
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of
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cell phones
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whereas
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Malaysia
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had
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number
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of personal
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. At a fleeting glance,Sn Mario had double
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of mobiles which was 100 per
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as compared to
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Chile.
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Malaysia
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had 50 per
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more cellphones whilst to France.The Iceland had maximum
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of mobile phones which was 900 per
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,Zealand had
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number
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of mobile phones
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to
Malaysia
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by 300 per
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. Probing ahead,San
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had
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proportion of personal
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which was 720 per
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as compared to other nations.Both
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Chile and
Malaysia
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had
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number
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of personal
computers
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which was 100 per
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,Iceland had 100 per
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more personal
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in comparison to France.
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Zealand had 350 per
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personal
computers
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, computers, thousand, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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