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• In the developed world, technological progress is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of radical technological advancements.

Technical
development
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 brings us many benefits in our daily life e.g. faster communication, efficient logistics, job opportunities etc.
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, the rapid change in
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also
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lead
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 to
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 impact on individuals and
society
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 from economic and social perspectives. Measures can be taken to alleviate the problem brought
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 technological
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.
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 technological improvement creates job opportunities in
society
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, many jobs with manual and repetitive in nature are being diminished. People who have low educational levels and work in low-tech industries are prone to unemployment nowadays.
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, the assembly work in the car production industry is replaced by machinery. Some restaurants use
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 to replace waiters.
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 technical progress affects individuals who lack education and cannot
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 t the changing employment market. From the social perspective, the advancement in
technology
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 widens the gap between the rich and
poor
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the poor
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. Technical giants e.g. Google, Meta, Bing etc, have the dominant advantage in controlling the technical resources.
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, Google dominates the search engine and streaming platform in the world. It
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results
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 enterprises’ reliance on them on promoting their business. Local and small companies which may not have access to technological resources cannot have an edge in the market and may be easily eliminated. The great improvement in
technology
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 brings illegal activities,
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, the advancement in social media nurtures cross-border scams and human trafficking. There are recent reports that youngsters get to know criminals on the Internet to find job opportunities overseas but
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 kidnapped in south-east Asian countries. With technological
development
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, criminals cannot be easily cracked down as they use specialised applications
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to remove their
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 on the internet. The government should impose better regulations which align with
the
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technological
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 and serve
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society
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 nowadays. Technological companies are encouraged to provide education
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technology
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 to underprivileged families and elderlies so as to help them to adapt to the
technology
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development
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, there are upsides and downsides
of
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 rapid technological
development
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 for individuals and
society
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. We can embrace the benefit brought by technological advancement through better regulation and cooperation in the community

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tech
  • change
  • job
  • work
  • skill
  • learn
  • school
  • life
  • time
  • health
  • mind
  • risk
  • harm
  • safe
  • help
  • data
  • law
  • rule
  • plan
  • cost
  • money
  • access
  • fair
  • equal
  • trust
  • open
  • use
  • power
  • control
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