The government should control the content of violence in films and on TV to decrease the level of violent crime in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Do violence in
films
cause an increase in crime?
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essay will discuss the topic. Violence in
films
could lead to an increase especially in kids because they are more susceptible than older audiences so they should be laws that prevent children from watching violent
films
but not be banned completely.
On the other
hand
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violent
films
are
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for adults are
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fun entertainment. In
summary
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kids should not watch violent
films
because they
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susceptible to violence and adults can watch it
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