Some people say that children should go to school as young as possible, while others believe that children should not start primary school until they are six or seven-years-old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

According to
me as
children
go
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to
the
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apply
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school at
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a
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very young
age
like six or
seven-
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seven years old
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years
-old
have
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has
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advantagesadvantages
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advantages advantages
as well as
disadvantages too. My opinion is discussed below.
Firstly
, as
a
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apply
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children
go
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going
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to
a
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apply
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school
as
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at
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young
age
have
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has
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some benefits likes. When kids are 5
years
old as
there
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their
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a
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apply
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parents are working
then
it is good for the
children
if they go to the institution. If
the
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people
will go to the institution very early
than
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then
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they will spend less time with
there
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their
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parents. As they will go to
the
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apply
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schooling
then
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the
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word
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work
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load will be more on them.
For example
, a child will go to
the
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apply
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schooling
then
will learn new things and will meet new
people
.
Secondly
, there are
also
some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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of
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for
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kids who go to
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the institution
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institution
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institutions
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at
early
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an early
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age
they are.
For example
, if the child will stay at the house
then
he will meet
less
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fewer
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people
.
Thirdly
, if the
people
go at 5
years
age
then
the teacher should give less homework. There should be less study for
this
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these
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students. For the group
its
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it's
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better to go after 6 or 7
years
. In conclusion, going the school have both sides advantage and disadvantage. As mentioned above the
parsent
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parents
should
sent
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send
be sent
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there
the
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their
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children
at
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to
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primary in the
age
at
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of
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6
years
. In my opinion, as
disuss
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discussed
above
go
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going
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primary after 6
years
have more benefits. So, its
more
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apply
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better if girls and boys go to
the
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apply
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schooling after six or
seven-
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seven years
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years
age
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of age
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.
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