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Some people say that children should go to school as young as possible, while others believe that children should not start primary school until they are six or seven-years-old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #school #six #seven-years-old
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children
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go
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 to
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school at
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very young
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 like six or
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seven years old
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advantagesadvantages
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advantages advantages
as well as
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 disadvantages too. My opinion is discussed below.
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children
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school
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 some benefits likes. When kids are 5
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parents are working
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 it is good for the
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 if they go to the institution. If
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people
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 will go to the institution very early
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then
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 they will spend less time with
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 parents. As they will go to
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schooling
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then
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, a child will go to
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schooling
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 will learn new things and will meet new
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, there are
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of
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 kids who go to
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the institution
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institution
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institutions
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an early
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age
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, if the child will stay at the house
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 he will meet
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people
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, if the
people
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 go at 5
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age
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then
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 the teacher should give less homework. There should be less study for
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 students. For the group
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 better to go after 6 or 7
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. In conclusion, going the school have both sides advantage and disadvantage. As mentioned above the
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parents
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 there
the
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children
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at
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 primary in the
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 6
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. In my opinion, as
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discussed
 above
go
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 primary after 6
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 have more benefits. So, its
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better if girls and boys go to
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schooling after six or
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seven years
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years
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age
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of age
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