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The number of students who choose to study mathematics at university is low. Why do you think this is? What can be done about this situation?

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It has been observed that high school graduates are not very interested in studying
mathematics
 at
tertiary
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 level. I believe exploring the causes of
this
 problem can assist in finding suitable solutions to help resolve it. The old-fashioned way
mathematics
 is taught
is
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 school could partly account for a lack of desire to
study
this
 subject at
university
. Many schools, unfortunately, follow a dull curriculum that does not inspire
students
 to pursue the
study
 of
mathematics
 later in life. Learners often complain that solving
mathematics
 problems is boring and impractical. To address
this
 situation, those who design
mathematics
-based
courses
 should create lesson plans that include content with real-life applications. They could even incorporate the use of apps and the latest forms of technology into lessons to make them more attractive.
As a result
,
students
 would become curious about the practical uses of
mathematics
 and opt to
study
 it
further
 at
university
. Low
mathematics
 scores awarded to
students
 can
also
 explain why pupils choose other
courses
 as part of their tertiary education.
For instance
, I remember that some of my friends were
initially
 interested in learning calculus.
However
, since their teacher gave them a
grueling
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 mid-term test, they lost all their enthusiasm upon receiving
their
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poor marks. If teachers designed tests that were fair and based on what youngsters learn in class, pupils would be more drawn to
mathematics
. Developing a sense of achievement through passing a
mathematics
 test could
also
 boost
students
’ confidence in solving more difficult math problems in
courses
 at
university
.
To conclude
, even though ineffective teaching and assessment methods have contributed to dwindling numbers of
students
 who choose
mathematics
 as their field of
study
 at
university
, both course developers and teachers can help remedy the situation. Including more practical lessons in
mathematics
courses
as well as
 administering more reasonable tests are steps in
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 direction.
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