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The number of students who choose to study mathematics at university is low. Why do you think this is? What can be done about this situation?

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It has been observed that high school graduates are not very interested in studying
mathematics
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 at
tertiary
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 level. I believe exploring the causes of
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 problem can assist in finding suitable solutions to help resolve it. The old-fashioned way
mathematics
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 is taught
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 school could partly account for a lack of desire to
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university
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. Many schools, unfortunately, follow a dull curriculum that does not inspire
students
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 to pursue the
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 of
mathematics
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 later in life. Learners often complain that solving
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 problems is boring and impractical. To address
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 situation, those who design
mathematics
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-based
courses
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 should create lesson plans that include content with real-life applications. They could even incorporate the use of apps and the latest forms of technology into lessons to make them more attractive.
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,
students
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 would become curious about the practical uses of
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 and opt to
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 it
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 at
university
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. Low
mathematics
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 scores awarded to
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 can
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 explain why pupils choose other
courses
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 as part of their tertiary education.
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, I remember that some of my friends were
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 interested in learning calculus.
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, since their teacher gave them a
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 mid-term test, they lost all their enthusiasm upon receiving
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poor marks. If teachers designed tests that were fair and based on what youngsters learn in class, pupils would be more drawn to
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. Developing a sense of achievement through passing a
mathematics
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 test could
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students
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’ confidence in solving more difficult math problems in
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 at
university
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.
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, even though ineffective teaching and assessment methods have contributed to dwindling numbers of
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 who choose
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 as their field of
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 at
university
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, both course developers and teachers can help remedy the situation. Including more practical lessons in
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courses
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as well as
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 administering more reasonable tests are steps in
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 direction.
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