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Band 6.5

It will be better for society and individuals if driverless cars are widely used. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#society #individuals #driverless #cars
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It is said it will be best for
community
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the community
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 and
people
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 if self-driving
vehicles
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 are widely utilized. I totally agree with
this
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 statement because
driverless
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cars
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 can have
a positive impacts
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a positive impact
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 on both individuals and society.
To begin
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 with, there are several reasons why I believe that
cars
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 powered by artificial intelligence can be beneficial for
people
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 and
community
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. Regarding individuals, self-driving
cars
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 can create more time for
people
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.
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 is because
people
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 could use commuting time from home to work or school
in
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for
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 valuable things namely, sleep,
relax
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, and
finsh
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finish
 their work or study responsibilities.
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, make
people
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 live more
comfortable
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.
Furthermore
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,
the
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vehicles
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 powered by artificial intelligence require less maintenance .
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 is
due to
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 the fact that self-driving
vehicles
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often
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are often
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 made from
high quality
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 materials compared to traditional
cars
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.
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,
people
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 can avoid
high
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the high
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 cost of maintenance and they can save a considerable amount of money. When it comes to society,
the
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driverless
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cars
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 can contribute alleviate traffic congestion. To illustrate,
the
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apply
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traffic jams often result
of
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from
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 bad
drivers
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driving
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 habits
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 sudden
stop
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stops
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,
sudden
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and sudden
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turn
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turns
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 right or left , which means
driverless
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cars
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 can eliminate
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these
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this
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 bad habits
of
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apply
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humans.
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,
the
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apply
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driverless
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vehicles
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 will assist to reduce the
amont
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amount
 of Co2 footprint from
cars
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.
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 is because
cars
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 powered by artificial intelligence can use the fuel in
efficient
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an efficient
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 way.
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, self-driving
vehicles
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 will contribute to
mitigate
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mitigating
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 climate change and global warming
reuslt
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result
 of
minimize
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minimising
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 the amount of Co2 emissions
on
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in
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 the atmosphere.
To sum up
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, I strongly believe that self-driving
cars
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 can have
a positive impacts
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a positive impact
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 on both
people
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 and
community
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the community
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,
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apply
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 because
it
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they
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 will make the life of individuals more convenient and
eonomical
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economical
.
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 ,self-driving
cars
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are advantageuos
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advantageuos
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advantageous
advantages
 for
scoiety
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society
 because
it
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they
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 will
easy
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ease
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 traffic jams
as well as
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 it
environmentally-friendly
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environmentally friendly
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.
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