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It is often said that to become a successful business a tertiary education is not at all necessary. To what extent you agree or disagree. Give your opinion.

#business #education
Education
 is a key
for
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 being profitable and it is cumbersome to lead a job market without it;
however
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 there are some who believe that higher
education
 is not essential to grow in any
business
 field. Personally, I
am not totally agree
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 with
this
 idea and
this
 essay will discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs, including some examples from my own experience. At the outset, nowadays,
business
 is considered one of the most famous and prospering types of work,
as well as
 qualifications
on
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business
 administration
is
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are
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 growing day by day. Most people are striving to have
own
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their own
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 occupation because of its convenience and flexibility. Even
the
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graduates change their
career
 direction to
business
administrartion
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administration
 if they are dissatisfied with their qualifications.
Likewise
, most universities offer a program
which
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named Master of
Business
 Administration
for
this
 reason
as well as
 the
amount
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 of novices have increasing who
tends
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tend
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 to choose
this
 faculty.
For instance
, the study which has taken in Germany shows that
this
 program peaked hit
education
 rates for
last
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the last
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 5 years.
On the other hand
,
the
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 number of individuals insist on the idea that anyone can accomplish in personal marketing
career
 without higher
education
. They claim that tuition has
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an affect
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affect
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in
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 specific
career
 areas,
such
 as
education
,
health
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and health
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. but not marketing.
Furthermore
, with
support
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the support
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 of technology, being successful in
business
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a business
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career
 is easier than
previous
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in previous
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 years. To exemplify, two decades ago, people could make an advertisement solely on TV or radio to gain profit from their
business
,
in contrast
 now social media gives them a great chance to flourish
on
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 their personal area. Personally, I believe that the role of
education
 is undeniable in any field from engineering to sculpturing. It provides coaching which all professionals need to fall depth of occupation. To personify, I
initially
 was working as a teacher,
as well as
 I had
small
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a small
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business
 on jewellery.
However
, I didn't have
income
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 which I wish.
Therefore
, I decided to study
in
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 The Master of
Business
 Administration and
subsequently
, I learned many secrets to become
lucky
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a lucky
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 businesswoman. In a nutshell, related
with
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 our modern era, it is not tough to tackle with rising of amount
in
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the
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private marketing.
Otherwise
, universities, training programs and
practicing
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practising
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 could have more out-turn
to
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in
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 be
professional
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a professional
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businessman
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businessmen
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • valuable
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • entrepreneurial
  • practical experience
  • success
  • tertiary education
  • networking opportunities
  • access to resources
  • combination
  • ideal
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