It is often said that to become a successful business a tertiary education is not at all necessary. To what extent you agree or disagree. Give your opinion.

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being profitable and it is cumbersome to lead a job market without it;
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however
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there are some who believe that higher
education
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is not essential to grow in any
business
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field. Personally, I
am not totally agree
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with
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idea and
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essay will discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs, including some examples from my own experience. At the outset, nowadays,
business
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is considered one of the most famous and prospering types of work,
as well as
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qualifications
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business
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administration
is
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growing day by day. Most people are striving to have
own
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their own
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occupation because of its convenience and flexibility. Even
the
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graduates change their
career
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direction to
business
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administrartion
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administration
if they are dissatisfied with their qualifications.
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, most universities offer a program
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named Master of
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for
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this
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reason
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the
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of novices have increasing who
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to choose
this
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faculty.
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, the study which has taken in Germany shows that
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program peaked hit
education
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rates for
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last
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5 years.
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,
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number of individuals insist on the idea that anyone can accomplish in personal marketing
career
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without higher
education
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. They claim that tuition has
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affect
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in
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specific
career
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areas,
such
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as
education
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,
health
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and health
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. but not marketing.
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, with
support
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of technology, being successful in
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business
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a business
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career
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is easier than
previous
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in previous
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years. To exemplify, two decades ago, people could make an advertisement solely on TV or radio to gain profit from their
business
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,
in contrast
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now social media gives them a great chance to flourish
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their personal area. Personally, I believe that the role of
education
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is undeniable in any field from engineering to sculpturing. It provides coaching which all professionals need to fall depth of occupation. To personify, I
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was working as a teacher,
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I had
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business
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on jewellery.
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, I didn't have
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which I wish.
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, I decided to study
in
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for
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The Master of
Business
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Administration and
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, I learned many secrets to become
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businesswoman. In a nutshell, related
with
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our modern era, it is not tough to tackle with rising of amount
in
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apply
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the
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private marketing.
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, universities, training programs and
practicing
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could have more out-turn
to
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in
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be
professional
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a professional
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businessman
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businessmen
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • valuable
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • entrepreneurial
  • practical experience
  • success
  • tertiary education
  • networking opportunities
  • access to resources
  • combination
  • ideal
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