the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.
The two maps provided illustrate the current industrial area in the town of Nutrition and its proposed redevelopment plan for the future
Overall
, it is evident that the town of Norbition will undergo a dramatic transformation from an industrial area into a residential zone.
In the current redevelopment plan, all of the factories in the city will be replaced by residential accommodations and public services. To the southwest of the roundabout, there will be shops, Linking Words
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a medical centre will be constructed to its southeast. On the eastern street, houses and a playground will be situated on the middle-top side, with a school located Linking Words
at the end
. A new road will be constructed extending from the northeast of the roundabout, with residential housing situated on the top side and at the edge.
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Moreover
, a bridge will be constructed to the north, spanning across the river, with residential housing situated along its length. Linking Words
This
will result in the relocation of farmland to the east. Linking Words
Lastly
, a second roundabout will Linking Words
also
be built on the freeway and connected to the original one.Linking Words
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