the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.

the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities.
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The two maps provided illustrate the current industrial area in the town of Nutrition and its proposed redevelopment plan for the future
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, it is evident that the town of Norbition will undergo a dramatic transformation from an industrial area into a residential zone. In the current redevelopment plan, all of the factories in the city will be replaced by residential accommodations and public services. To the southwest of the roundabout, there will be shops,
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a medical centre will be constructed to its southeast. On the eastern street, houses and a playground will be situated on the middle-top side, with a school located
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. A new road will be constructed extending from the northeast of the roundabout, with residential housing situated on the top side and at the edge.
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, a bridge will be constructed to the north, spanning across the river, with residential housing situated along its length.
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will result in the relocation of farmland to the east.
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, a second roundabout will
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be built on the freeway and connected to the original one.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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