the diagrams below show the results of a survey from taiwan explaining how students waiting to study overseas, chose a university from 1998 to 2008

the diagrams below show the results of a survey from taiwan explaining how students waiting to study overseas, chose a university from 1998 to 2008
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The two tables given Illustrate the reasons the male and females from Taiwan wanted to study overseas at a university in 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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, in 1998 both of them
men
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and
women
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choose the ranking of university becoming the main reason to study abroad,
while
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in 2008
cost
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of the tuition became the main consideration.
Furthermore
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, the modern teaching method was the least passion of those. Turning to the detail,
it is clear that
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in 1998 100 % of males and females choose the ranking of a university as the first reason to study overseas followed by the
cost
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of tuition at 93 % in
women
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and the
cost
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of accommodation in
men
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at 92 %.
In contrast
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, the
cost
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of tuition become the main choice in 2008
women
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and
men
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were just different by 2% with about 95 % and 97 % respectively.
On the other hand
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, the modern teaching method was the least attention from
men
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and
women
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in two different years 8 % and 5 % in 1998 and changes to become 7 % and 2 % after 10 years
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